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Casting Words Upon The Waters
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Casting Words Upon The Waters |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
As vapor cooled condensed to mist by elemental bond is formed the thoughts that flow with subtle twist are polarised before the storm The mist collects on up-turned leaf repeated countless times and then what's come to be will seek relief as weight does cause the branch to bend Small droplets heed gravity's pull and fall enmasse onto the ground as vessels when they're over-full will burst unless surcease is found A trickle formed becomes a stream that rushes swift along it's path while deluged by so many things the words reflect their aftermath The stream into a river swells that courses sure down to the sea what has been left behind will tell a tale etched in eternity The sea from whose depths life has sprung now serves to keep one more child young |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Doc..... Speaking as one who has always had a love affair going with words........ I enjoyed this one tremendously! It definitely got my vote, and I would vote again, except there's only one box!!!!! Love received is equal to love given! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh my...this is superb analogy, imaginative language, tender phrasing...simply put, a beautiful study of the creative process. Poetry of the soul, one might say. I loved it. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DrMoose~ This is positively brilliantly perfect ! ! Oh, how it literally rolls off the tongue ... what a GREAT read-aloud piece. The cadence marches me along in perfect-stepped harmony. Be very proud of this piece ... it is of showcase quality. Oh, yeah ... and I like it, too !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Beautiful, Dr. Moose! I love it! Denise |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sunny1,Claire,Marge,d, Thank you all for your most kind comments ! Again , this is not my usual fare , but just something that slipped out between the cracks.One must be very careful with moose eggs . Doc |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
what wonderful wordage you do use dear Moose. ~H |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm so glad you laid this egg, Doc! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
X Angel, Thank you , this is a very supportive place . Sunshine , Had to give up my juggling act , too many omelettes , thanks . Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
never had a moose egg omelette before... I really enjoyed this, tho, Dr. Moose...have just placed my order... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity, I've been told that some of them are actually quite tasty . Bon appetit ! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! |
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