Open Poetry #7 |
I sing |
7 Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 113Amherst, MA, USA |
I sing I sing wind free strong wind power to fly swallow the sky carry pain away (for it's not mine) I sing fire honest passionate fire power to ignite bring all to light burn past away (for it's not mine) I sing water smooth flowing water power to float fast or slow drown brain away (for it's not mine) I never sing earth dead, dreamless earth power to freeze the wind in its trees silence my song (for it's mine) Actually, I have a revision of this, one that's more rhythmic, but I can't find it now. I'll post it later, if you want. -7 [This message has been edited by 7 (edited 04-30-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I think this one is pretty good but if you have one you made even better, please do post it!! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent. Is the revision a change in the meaning of the poem? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I liked it a lot!!!!!.Welcome to passion.!!!!!! |
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