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Teen Poetry #4

All Her Love

TrueLUV
Member

since 2000-07-19

Posts 158
Connecticut, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-01-28 06:10 PM

She gave me all her love
But only half her heart
At times when I had lost all hope
She gave me all her love
But only half the time
She kept me at repose with my such misunderstood soul
When I felt as if I had to leave this world
She showed me her soul
I felt how much love she had for me
Yet,
She only loved me half the time and,
gave to me only half her heart

anomaly187
Member

since 2000-06-15

Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US

1 posted 2001-01-28 06:14 PM

you really expressed yourself
well in such a short poem...and
i really loved the whole
"she gave me all her love
but only half her heart" basis..
great work on this

"When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-01-28 11:13 PM

This was a good one. I like the half theme of the poem. very sad, but good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-01-29 01:58 PM

This is very good
You've shown a big point in a short poem

"She only loved me half the time and,
gave to me only half her heart"

most beautiful lines/stanzas
keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-01-29 05:09 PM

This was good. Sometimes all of your love just can't be enough.

xoxo
Jenn

"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

5 posted 2001-01-29 05:35 PM

Hey, this is such a great poem and i loved it so much and it shows soooooooo much heart in it and im soooooo sorry she only gave you half the heart!

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