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FallNTears Junior Member
since 2001-03-05
Posts 20 |
Emotions winding Around my heart Tighter, tighter They tangle Slowly, but surely Cutting it in half Breaking my heart Winding around My very soul Capturing my mind Grasping my world And turning it upside down *Me* *Having a nightmare is nothing compared to living one.* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to passions....I thought that this poem was quite well done. I hope to see you around more often!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Another simple, profound piece. Emotions can really suck.  Personally, I find myself to be quite controlled emotionally. The key is rationalization. Although some people have moral objections to over-rationalization in some situations... Well, just my advice. Another job very well done, FallNTears. I love the subject matter you write about. I certainly hope you stay around for a very long time!  ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
This is the first of yours I have read and I have to say I'm impressed. Very nice poem. Emotions can be a terrible thing, but I guess they can be good too, I just have never seen them be. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh this is such a good work of art! It;s going in my library! Thanks! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Neokrew Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 60VA |
WOW a poem that is not closed, this must have been one of the ones you did before you hit the 3 limit. How do you do it gosh all these poems in 1 day. My advice to you is to spend a little bit more time on your poems and less time posting them before they are fully finished and also I don't know your situation but it does not seem to me that you are writting what you feel or going through they just don't seem to be true to me I don't know. Oh and your "" sounds like I have heard something similar to it maybe on another pippers (if you know where you found it tell me I like it) by the way welcome to piptalk. -- Justin M. hehe |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Yes Neo, this doesn't have to be closed I do hope things get better for you Life sometimes feels like it's against us hang in there and be strong keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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