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MY valentine's day! (this should be interesting)
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MY valentine's day! (this should be interesting) |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Knocking softly, not knowing if I should be there, or at my house, or not. The rain falling around, the porch sheilding me from it, wanting to see you, or not. Opening the door, the phone by your ear, you didn't have to hang up, but you did. Handing you the flower, I turned to leave, and you didn't have to say 'wait', but you did. So I turned back around to listen to you say, you hadn't known I would stop by, you'll give me what you have for me, some other day. And the day would've been ruined, had it been any other day, except for one already hated, the dreadful Valentine's day. Instead of taking that as you forgot, I took it into my glee, The reason you had said that, is because again you wanted to see me. And when I next see you, I hope with all my heart, that what we are will be visible to you, that's somethng you need to see. Hard to turn a day into a poem, don't ya think? I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa, I think you actually did a real good job doing it You're not only a good writer but a good narrator too I'm glad to see that you're trying to see then positive things in every bad Is this Nitsuj? Why, didn't he come visit you? So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
that was nice. it was a great idea to turn the day into a poem. you used great imagery. Regina for those who say I'm their friend, u know me not well for if u did u would not stay around anymore to watch me fall away. |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
Hi. I'm new here, and don't quite know the ropes. I really liked your poem Allysa. It's neat. =-) Shortilove |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Nice job on this, I like it and hope things go well  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Life sucks. I'll keep you all up to date tomorrow. Hopefully I'll have figured it out by then. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Awwww, this is sweet, and sad. Men tend to suck... hehe they are oblivious... xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
great turn out it sounds like! i had a great valentines too! you should express your feelings towards them! i bet youd end up together! this was a great post! keep up your good work. i hope to read a new one from you soon... love always, *ChrisLover*(janette) Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely done here........I could follow your day perfectly. Sounds sweet and your attitude is very positive. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Um, acire, he didn't visit me because he's a guy and he doesn't have ANY sense of direction what so ever so he has no idea as to where I live, besides the fact that he was babysitting at his cousin's house which was why I decided to see him in the first place. Jenn, guys don't always suck, I have devised a plan to figure out some stuff. Dopey, I don't have a good attitude anymore. It changed about ten seconds after I posted that poem and went to school. Bad attitude. You'd think that if Justin were going to flirt with someone online, next time he might want to make sure that the person doesn't go to my school, and hasn't been one of my best friends for about two years!!! Tell me about your Valentine's Day. And thanks for writing back in e mail. I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. |
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