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Prideful Anguish
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Prideful Anguish |
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greysolace Member
since 2006-03-27
Posts 71 |
Prideful Anguish I can’t cry anymore My personal strength has made sure of that So now I am depriving myself of that therapy I’m too strong to shed a tear For it would bring about unwanted sympathy And that’s not what I want I’d rather stick to my shadows Walk somnambulistly through my days My mind pensive and slowly giving way to darkness While with each look, I beg for rescue Though when it comes, I slightly brush it off And amaze myself by forcing a smile I know why I do it Why I cause myself such unnecessary pain I’m afraid to show weakness Convinced that my tears would make others rethink me That my tears would bring my own downfall Instead of my salvation Damn my pride ~~Poetry is written emotion~~ |
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niere Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 77 |
I really really feel this poem - I'm sure a lot of people do. I think the last line sums up the whole thing perfectly... and it sounds so disdainful and self-loathing. (I just hope that it's not you lol) excellent piece.  |
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playing.with.crayons Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362Neverland |
This write has such potential... the emotion and feel behind the words is all real, and you have some really good lines that hits it right in the spot - my only piece of advice would be, with this type of poem and the feel I get that you've been writing for a while, that you use a few more metaphors and similies. Give us all a chance to actually see the picture and not only hear the words. Still, a lovely write. Hope to see more. xx cheye farewell the ash-tray girl |
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yuna New Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 9 |
i really enjoyed this poem, i get a sense of self reflection and i love the conclusion which i find is the last line.. "damn my pride"...... brilliant! |
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