Open Poetry #32 |
The ages |
velociraptor Junior Member
since 2003-07-23
Posts 12 |
THE AGES I have imagined walking through the future and back into the past what i found there was a real big blast I discovered a glamorous jewel one that looked like a great big pool one that said never dive to deep or you will suffer the bends so don’t run into me or I’ll say the END Daniel |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Smiling at you son... one that said never dive to deep or you will suffer the bends You have said alot in just these two lines alone. love you Chumna I'm adding this to my library..of course Mum The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Daniel, a very good poem for your first entrance into Passions! We've been waiting, and I, for one, am very pleased! I know a young man who is quite fond of dinosaurs and such - perhaps someday I can introduce you to him. Now, go hug your Mom! Welcome to Passions! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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velociraptor Junior Member
since 2003-07-23
Posts 12 |
Thanks you Sunshine for the lovley comment Daniel |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hey Danieldude! I've often imagined a stroll through time as well. In fact, its a good way to find out exactly where you are right this minute. Cool poem! ~wranx |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! WELCOME TO PASSIONS DANIEL! I see excellent writing runs in the family. I very much enjoyed reading your first post. And, I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome to passions |
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the romantic fanatic Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 26Spokane, WA U.S.A. |
Nicely done. And, of course, welcome! |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
This is absolutely gorgeous... It looks like DA's little acorn has turned into his own poetry oak... I can't wait to see more. I AM smiling... |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
Lovely to have you back Daniel! Not only is your rhyming great but great use of metaphor too! Hope to see you again (check your email for a special PIP greeting) |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome...strong entrance. ThisDiamond |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hi Daniel! welcome to Passions! |
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velociraptor Junior Member
since 2003-07-23
Posts 12 |
thanks everybody |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Excellent post Daniel, keep it up! Looking forward to your next. |
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