Dark Poetry #1 |
my first post here:) |
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Pitch Black(a dark haiku) Hunted prey cornered Cold hard barrel with warn tears My finger squeezes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
kaile came to the dark to play this is very good...I cant write haiku...im too long winded lol...you made it look easy. take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Welcome to Dark Passions Kaile. I too think you made this look easy. Not easy for me, haiku, I've tried. Joy |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Welcome to the dark, Kaile. I've always liked haiku. Now I look at in a whole new way. Never thought of it as dark before...thanks. Good job. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Welcome to the dark forum. Haiku is somewhat daunting to me, if you keep posting here I may summon the courage to try one. Welcome!! May the world hug you today, With it's warmth and love. I pray it whispers a joyful tune in your heart, That tell you there is a friend sitting in another corner of the world, Wishing you well and wishing you love...... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Aiden Kelly Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 148Ft. Wayne, IN USA |
i love this!!! very dark, so simple yet.... what an impact a few words can make...that's why i love japanese poetry! great work! WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thank you all for liking this ") |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Wow. Your first poem is already pretty impressive. Uh... guess i'm juz like the rest who think Haikus are juz awesome pieces of poetry, which I can't write, coz like Janet Marie says, too long winded. =P |
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