Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
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South Carolina, USA
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2005-04-17
10:08 AM
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Their cloak, a tattered blue or grey astride the shattered lawn. Born tender lads who quietly prayed and now from earth are gone.
Heavy fell her heart, discharged a leaden ball Thundering her ears, the sears of darkened day to fall The powder flashed eternal through her silken mind And passed along lapels of gray as destiny defined
They fought against a brethren foe encroaching trenches dug and never would again most know a tender warming hug.
Heavy fell her heart, along the scorched dry field Thundering eternally, a cause that could not yield In charred born blackened dreams of war resigned To take a man her life revolved this liberty to find
A war of words that grew from spite which each believed was true. Too many sons would cry in flight and spill their bloods anew.
Heavy fell her tears to soak the earth so dry Wandering the stagnant air along a gray night sky It seems that dreams the frail to frayed, bowed lastly in disclose The arguments bought with the blood a sedentary rose
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Barry J. Tackett
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MGROVES
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since 2004-02-01
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california
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2005-04-17
10:12 AM
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a pleasure this fine morning~ enjoyed~My spirit will rise above the sea~ There will be no drowning of my soul or me~
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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
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2005-04-17
10:15 AM
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Truly heartwrenching! Great result of your harmonious duetting!
Love, Margherita
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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
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2005-04-17
10:18 AM
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I believe I know who wrote what, as a gentle twine of voices left the sedentary rose...
beautiful!
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Magnus
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since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA
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2005-04-17
10:21 AM
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Kathy wrote beautifully, far beyond my meager fare. Always able to reach the mark, a gem for certain.
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
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2005-04-17
02:02 PM
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Barry and Kathy, I absolutely love reading your captivating collaborations!
You two are a poetic duo of the highest degree!
Linda
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
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2005-04-17
02:30 PM
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So very well done!!!
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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
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2005-04-17
02:33 PM
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This is wonderful!
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yv
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2005-04-17
04:01 PM
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Wow. That was enchanting. I can't find anything wrong with this poem, even I wanted to critique it. It's masterfully written.Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.
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passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
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2005-04-17
04:07 PM
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I always enjoy you two in duets
lovely
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ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
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2005-04-18
07:54 PM
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If not for your enduring spirit and keen eye for detail, I could not write to such reality Barry. Make no mistake...the pleasure is certainly mine.
Thank you all for your kind responses. TD
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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
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2005-04-18
07:57 PM
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Nice writing...James
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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
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2005-04-18
08:44 PM
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An exquisite duet from two of Passions finest! Very much enjoyed...hugs to you both. For it was not into my ear you whispered But into my heart It was not my lips you kissed But my soul
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Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
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2005-04-18
09:50 PM
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Kathleen and Magnus~ Crying always gives me puffy eyes ... so, thanks you two~
Beautiful story-poem ... tenderly penned~ *Huglets* to both *Huglets* ~*Marge*~~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))><
Email noles1@totcon.com
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Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
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2005-04-18
10:26 PM
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I love the step back in history, and the ever true sorrows of the heart and the loss of loved ones to war - well done you two-
SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .
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garysgirl
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Florida, USA
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2005-04-27
07:45 AM
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Beautiful!!! Hugs, Ethel
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