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Legends and Time (my 2000th post whew!!)
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Legends and Time (my 2000th post whew!!) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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In the cool of the eve a light Autumn breeze roamed through a crowd in the park. And the overhead lights shone down through the night warmly replacing the dark. And some folk singer moaned bout his soul and his home and the miseries of the heart. While an old man from the past went round and asked for a cup and some common regard. Oh how the grey sage could look through his age with a smile spread cross his face. And his movements were slow and his words he spoke low with the art of amourous grace. "I need a loan sir I can't go any farther I'm down and broke in this place, but there's a story I tell and if you listen well you'll know why I live this disgrace." Well I just had to listen cause something was missing and I knew this wasn't a lie. I put my hand on his shoulder and passed him a folder and asked him to empty his mind. He said, "can you wait a minute before I begin it I have to draw from the memory vine." He slowly reached in to his coat worn thin and pulled out his bottle of time. With a tear in his eye he began "I once had great friends and planes to fly in I once had a Rolls Royce pride. And I was the best that ever was blessed with a talent to sing songs and write. Now that it's over I've never been sober since I lost the one love of my life. Now that she's gone I keep ramblin on chasing this pain in my mind. "My name is Bob Dallas just a plain southern fella I hail from the state of sunshine. As a boy I got thinkin about writin and singin to people who needed to cry. Cause this thing called a heart could tear souls apart no matter rich man or wise. So somehwere within like whiskey or gin I loosened the ropes on the mind." I wrote about the stars and the blues in the heart and hurt that no one explains. And many discovered that losers were'nt lovers they just lived in a world full of pain. And to search for the truth was a hard thing to do and the news might make one insane. But there's always a beginning after each finish and a chance to start over again" "Well some fellas up north had heard a report of my singing and soothing ways. When they came to see me I thought I was dreaming there was albums they wanted to make. And before I knew it I was on TV to prove it singin songs that I wrote yesterday. It happened so fast more than I could ask and I played on the golden star stage." "I made many recordings and reaped the rewardings of a musical stack of joy. And with that came the fame and a great name for the heart warming skills I employed. Then I met a lady who made me unsteady with eyes that emptied my soul. When her lips clung to mine I spun out of time and my heart beat like a drum roll." "Did you ever love a woman till almost inhuman was the love you had to give? And she'd always be there to give you the care that gave you the reason to live. With a smile so warm and voice full of charm a sweet hosting precious wife. And a mind so fair under long golden hair the total essence of life." "With child she became and the slight of her frame filled up with a miracle thrill. Her days did abound with plans all around I can hear her laughter still. Six months came along and she was put hard strong for the love of her dear mother. So pure was her way and full with no shame I could hardly deny her the bother." "Careful plans had been made that I would convey her to the flight of her mother. But early that day my work poached me away and I drank to one song or another. When it came time to leave I was plagued with unease I'd become sorely unwound. While sluggish I thought I'd not want to get caught out on the freeway unsound." "So my condition I'd defend and called a dear friend to escort my love for the part. And I'd stay behind with low presence of mind to get back to a sensible sort. It was a bright summer day I watched them drive way and thought it the best to retire. While I drifted away way out of the day a foul second took their entire." "My love full of child the friend I beguiled all gone to the fate of bad luck. I was called on the phone from a grisly time zone so caught and horror struck! My selfish inclines toward the secrets of wine cost me the change of the gaurd. Now I was distraught my guts full of knots by seconds they could have been spared." "At such a great cost and with eveything lost to this bottle I've turned for the pain. And from the depths of this hell I never could tell if I was completely to blame. Each time I tried sober my heart would take over so I'd flush the terror away. But time does move on and mine's almost gone as I stand here to show it today." "So let me tell you son there is good to be done look after the things that are real. Because if they're precious you'll never regret it hold on to the love you can feel. Don't preoccupy with the chores of your life and skip past the ones that you love. If you recognize the wealth of that prize you've captured a gift from above." He turned with a reel and shuffled his heels into the crowd and the night. And the cool of the eve with a light Autumn breeze whispered his story and plight. And the dawn of the morn uncovered his form in a silent gazebo grave. While some might scorn the reason he was born his genius will alawys be played. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ethome, Excellent!! What a spellbinding tale of love and loss you have penned. Very well written my friend. I just couldn't stop reading!!  Congratulations on your 2000th post!!! Here is to many more!!  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
This was wonderful....brilliant storytelling.You know how to spin a yarn.These would make great song lyrics. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, now it's morning,  This is Utterly divinely incandescent. A very worthy 2000. (Didn't I say I've had the brats working their socks off )It is as wonderous as Aladdins cave, as stunning as the Victoria Falls, as spellbinding as Merlins' magic and delightful as the Arabian Nights.I really love this one. A really superb piece. Take care Mushy Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Ethome* This is exquisite work from one of the masters of weave...I've enjoyed your work for a very long time now and each piece show your growth as a poet...it's a pleasure to watch you dig deeper and explore new avenues...An excellent piece to mark your Milestone and shine as your 2000th post. Your replies and your poems are always enjoyed and I find myself looking forward to each one...superb work my friend...this said sincerely from the bottom of my heart~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"So let me tell you son there is good to be done look after the things that are real. Because if they're precious you'll never regret it hold on to the love you can feel. Don't preoccupy with the chores of your life and skip past the ones that you love. If you recognize the wealth of that prize you've captured a gift from above." Such wonderful and unique tale you've told here. Very intellegently crafted and flows smoothly all the way through keeping the reader absorbed. Liked "memory vine" and "bottle of time". This is definitly one of my favorites of yours. Nicely done, and congragulations on your 2000th! take care, Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my oh my do I love when ya sing the blues E-babes... this is an AWESOME weave.... so many lessons of life...so many truths Congrats on your 2000th ET ... and you have done your self proud on this landmark post... this is excellent... and I would like to thank you for the many replies to my work that make up some of your 2000...you have given me so much support, encouragement, and friendship since you joined her... and you know how much it means to me... way cool are you love and respect jm ============= These Are The Days Van Morrison These are the days of the endless summer These are the days, the time is now There is no past, there's only future There's only here, there's only now Oh your smiling face, your gracious presence The fires of spring are kindling bright Oh the radiant heart and the song of glory Crying freedom in the night These are the days by the sparkling river His timely grace and our treasured find This is the love of the one magician Turned the water into wine These are days of the endless dancing and the Long walks on the summer night These are the days of the true romancing When I'm holding you oh, so tight These are the days by the sparkling river His timely grace and our treasured find This is the love of the one great magician Turned water into wine These are the days now that we must savour And we must enjoy as we can These are the days that will last forever You've got to hold them in your heart. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Lone Wolf for the word spellbinding I'm glad you saw it that way...ethome Tony I have been spinning them since I was 10 yrs old so I guess nothing's changed...thanks for taking the time to read..ethome Marsha why do you keep giving me new ones to steal...thanks so much Marsha for your heartwarming replies...and all those references to...I really appreciate it!! Thanks Butterflies for such kind words as master of weave I really appreciate the fact that you take time to read and enjoy... thanks again...ethome Poeminister thank you for your thoughts and for picking out that verse it's one of my favs too thanks again!! Janet you know that I always look forward to replying to your posts. I want to thank you for your continued friendship and your understanding of the musical way I think things out I really appreciate your inspiration...love ya poet pal ethome |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethome--this is an amazing story, although it is a story that goes on many places, you have told it with such compassion and expressed it with such wisdom...and then in perfect rhythm and rhyme...I am just in awe... congratulations dear poet on 2000 and I also thank you for your replies to my poetry...they always make me feel that you have really understood and consider what you say...thank you! |
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ThyWizard Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 56Chambersburg, PA, USA |
Many wisdoms in words indeed...excellent piece. I enjoyed reading this, it was an eye opener to me towards the many sides of life...congrats on hitting the 2000 milestone " If who i am is what i have and what i have is lost, then who am I? " - unknown Tryps |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ethome: This is a wonderful read - I was enthralled right to the end - a beautiful piece. Congratulations on your 2000th post - a poet indeed! Roniece |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Ethome, Superb, you are a legend. Congratulations on your 2000th, a job well done. There are many stories as real as that out in the middle of the night. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Wow, you have a way with words. What a tale you weave. The bottle may bring you pleasure but in the end nightmares. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
A Great 2 0 0 0 th post!! So much wisdom shared here for whoever will read and listen with their soul. I guess that is how it can be in life... the most sorrowful tales can be the greatest lessons learned. Sadly, what a hard addiction this man faced in his life. Thank you for sharing and again congratulations on your 2000th. Bob <>< |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb my friend. . . I have always loved the way that you tell a story. . . and this is no exception. . . Wonderful. . . and congratulations on your 2,000th!!! ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Weave_Watcher Junior Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 21 |
Congrats on two thousand posts. I really liked this piece and have been reading your work for quite a while but I only just started replying. Great weave. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, CONGRATULATIONS 2000 Wow!You're nearly as old as me *laughs*. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Congratulations ethome..a wonderful post to celebrate your special #2000..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie thank you for the kind words and yes this does go on out there but I thought it would be interesting to create a piece about it...ethome Thanks wizard for the nice thoughts and glad you enjoyed the trip out there..take care Roniece thank you for taking the time to read and enjoy I appreciate your comments..ethome Daniel thanks so much for the legend comment I know I'm old enough to be one..thanks again!! inot2B I'm glad you liked the weave it was a lot of fun creating it....thanks so much..ethome Bob thanks for reading and for the wisdom comment I appreciate your comments so much! Sven thanks for your comment on story telling I think you tell a darn good one yourself.. take care..ethome Thanks weave...glad you're starting to post you'll enjoy doing that...write on!! Kethry you got a date we'll have a picnic!! thanks for your kind words and the tapestry comment...ethome..what kind of wine?? Victoria thanks for dropping in and for your thoughts...much appreciated..ethome... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, what an amazing post, saying "congratulations on your 2000th" hardly seems appropriate from the life lesson played out so well here on center stage! I am so very grateful to have come to know you, for I would not like to think that I had missed out on someone who could write like this... thank you... (and I'm putting this in my library, too...) Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
ethome ~ What a wonderfully woven tale, a truly incredible read from beginning to end. Wow, just wow!!!!!! And ~~~ Congratulations on 2,000! Bonnie |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Sunshine for your kind words and for sending this to your library. ......it's great to hear from you...ethome |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
E- this was just so awesome! i found myself enraptured in the middle of this story continuing to read faster so that i could find out what happened. i bow to the king of weave congratulations on 2000! takecare. ~amy~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hi sweetie!!! This is a wonderful tale you've penned here--congratulations on your 2000 post...I've enjoyed your work so much, and look forward to many many more. Really a great job!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Bonnie I'm sorry I missed you I keep reloading this page...what nice comments you left with me thank you very much....ethome |
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artsygrl Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 55Florida |
enthome, thanks for the welcome to the board...I really enjoyed the tale you woove here.... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Outstanding story telling in rhyme, and congrats on your 2000th poem posted! excellent! -Tier |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Amy for getting involved while you read..I appreciate your comments very much...ethome. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Ethome, I'm just in awe. This is simply a masterpiece. Big congrats on your 2000th!!! What a way to celebrate it. Juls |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Hi you, This is still as marvellous enthralling and wonderful as when I read it the first time. (Which happened to be 1 am, when I was winding down before I took to my bed to sleep the morning away.) Oh what an exciting life I lead, (puts hand to forehead in dramatic gesture.) Anyway the point is it is an excellantly written story in poem form. Utterly brilliant. And a wonderful example of your outstanding work. A fine one to celebrate your 2000. Take care Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the sweetie word Serenity (or is it Celeste) and for the great encouraging comments...ethome Thanks Artsygrl for taking the time to read and I hope you enjoy the many forums of Passions. Tiersdin thanks for reading this ballad and I hope to read some morew of your works soon. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Juliet for the masterpiece compliment ...I don't know about that but I sure like to hear it anyway...thanks again for your thoughts......ethome Thanks Marsha I really appreciate your upbuilding comments...have a nice day...ethome.... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You know what I think of your writing...but this is just awesome...a tale gently musically told...I can hear the sax in the backround...sweet sad song...congrats on the 2000th and heres to 2000 more... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula for the comments they are delightful and thanks for dropping in....... ethome |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ethome........this is a brilliant piece.....I truly love the whole story.....superb.. and ****CONGRATULATIONS*** with your 2000.... looking forward to see more from you. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Charisma for such wonderful comments I truly do appreciate it! ethome |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ethome my friend...it seems as if it were only yesterday that we were celebrating another milestone together and it is such a pleasure to be doing so again. What a wonderful tale of love you have woven and I must say that I was entranced enough to read it 3 times. You my friend are one of the masters here at Passions and I commend you and applaud you on a wonderful marking for your 2000th milestone post. Oh, and yes, I have gone acoustic but the reverb of the electric still hold that special trance over me, don't let there be any doubt about that my friend. Congrats again and looking to sharing many more episodes and history making moments with you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You have treated us with a captivating tale put to wonderful verse and expression. I loved so many of the lines in this poem. Your talents as a poet and a story teller shine through on your 2000th post. Congratulations on this wonderful poem and on your big 2000th. I loved this one Liz |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Congratulations, Ethome, on 2000! Fabulous writing!! Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark thank you so much...I don't think I've ever been more proud of anyone than I am of you....all the things you've accomplished and now you're writing beautiful open hearted poetry...it just thrills the old heart here to see you enjoy yourself so much and thanks for the kind words I really appreciate them so much.....take care ethome Eliazbeth those are wonderful upbuilding words you have left with me and they make my day...you know how much I love your poetry and I look forward to reading it always...ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry Denise I wasn't watching...thanks for the wonderful uplifting comment...ethome |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, my friend... here I am completely in awe, mystified, hypnotized, spellbound by this amazing poetry... and then I realise that this is a 2 th post from you and then realise how many of them have been replies to my little attempts at writing... It has been my pleasure to know you as a fellow writer... I bow to you, my friend... Take care and here's to many many more regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Sudhir those are wonderful adjectives you are pouring on me ..I hope I'm as deserving as they sound....love to read your always excellent work and it's been a pleasure exchanging thoughts here at Passions with a gentleman such as yourself.....have a nice day....ethome |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a wonderful tale... well told! *S* |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
FELICITATIONS on 2,000th Thank you for the pleasant readings that you provide each passing night... Looking 4ward to many many more... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-21-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting reading...congratulations on number 2000...James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Now I know why I enjoy your comments so much. Great write I fully enjoyed. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Suthern for taking the time to read the tale...ethome Hey Coco you're always so kind with your remarks thanks so much I appreciate it much more than you know....ethome Thanks James glad you could drop in for the read...ethome |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Seymour for the vote of confidence it's much appreciated...ethome |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I just had to come back and listen one more time...I love this one so much...come play for me sweet friend |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Paula I'm glad you look at it like a song...it has some musical qualities alright........ethome |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
simply awesome...i read this twice and i still feel like i havent captured the full sentiments of this piece....so eloquently written... saving this in my library also |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Kaile for the nice thoughts I'm so glad you enjoyed the read!! ....ethome. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A re-read befitting the beginning of the New Year! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wonderful!!!!!!!!!!!! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Ethome, Wonderful reading here, very much enjoyed it and am going to share it with my girls thank you so much. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Sunshine for the reread I appreciate your kind thoughts! Kathleen thank you for taking the time to drop in and read this...ethome Thanks Cerenity for reading and I hope the girls enjoy it...ethome |
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