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Teen Poetry #8

imma come over

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

0 posted 2008-04-21 03:50 PM

thats not really the title but yea

if u ever do me wrong
dont worry i'll be strong
i'll deal wit whatever you put me through
cuz baby i'm in love wit you
every night i cry
cuz without you
i'm weak
i feel like i'm about ta die
please give me some time ta confess
dont put me under stress
i wanna be with you

i'm running outta time
so the next time i see you
imma tell you that im still
in love wit you

umm this is kinda just ran outta my mouth or was it my mind well yea

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2008-04-21 10:52 PM

this was great. good job :]

if u ever do me wrong
dont worry i'll be strong
i'll deal wit whatever you put me through
cuz baby i'm in love wit you

best stanza :] great rhyme.

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

2 posted 2008-04-21 11:58 PM

thnx V i made it today
it just came out sorta

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

3 posted 2008-04-22 12:04 PM

it was good. song or poem?

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

justanotherstorm
Member

since 2007-10-24

Posts 321

4 posted 2008-04-22 06:42 PM

idk yet i might make it into a song iono maybe

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