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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513
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Phone ringing Friend Answers Talk Laugh Giggle Hum Sing Cry Tears Laugh again Giggle once more All better Love Peace Cherish Friendship Candie |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
THs isn't really a poem its more of words one word per line |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
who ever defined the structure of a poem? |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Websters dictionary? lol... It's an interesting idea, I don't like it as well as some of your other pieces but... Yes, it's interesting. "I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->--- |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
I acully kinda like it. Like its different and anything can be poetry. Yes its kinda different and a little strange but its simple. I like it. Creative. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
But to me it doesn't have any substance to it. It feels too simple too me. |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
don't just look at the words listen to the story they tell |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
i have a mixed opinion i think anything can be poetry- there is no definition but i also agree with what rhia said, it's a bit more smiple than i would have liked. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
It doesn't tell one to me, it needs more substance. |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
I think the words could've been picked alot better and if they were a little more complex it might of helped |
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