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Not So Anonymous |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. The phone rings To that silence On the other side An old man With a rasping voice Says goodbye . |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
nice. It is so nice to be polite. enjoyed. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I see him sitting on his straight chair, the plastic cover a bit cracked, his ankles so thin over his slip on's .. his clothes rumpled and his white hair illustrating "bed head" -- I smell his lonliness -- and I hear his fragile voice before it is silent. That's what your poem did to me. Alison |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
nice character snapshot, John |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
It also can be read like this, a very sad one. A frustrated old man was waiting for a call. But the call never came. So he dialed the number and said "goodbye" to the beeping sound of other end. |
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