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A home without a wall,
Our haven without ends,
A circle we all call
Our Family of Friends!

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Open Poetry #40
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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
0 posted 2007-05-19 08:46 PM

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You sit
On the front steps
Of your wooden house
Watching the hours go by

I with my friends
Pretend not to notice you
Still after with no one around

In my dreams
Over which I have no control
A young blond girl
With her enigmatic smile

And what is this
That softly whispers
In my ear

To take me
From my toys


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2007-05-20 10:16 AM

You efficiently use a cineaste's language and combine it with a sensitive heart.

Results are poetically perfect.

Love,
Margherita
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
2 posted 2007-05-20 10:17 AM

Just noticed that you have reached 3000 posts. Congratulations!
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
Los Angeles California
3 posted 2007-05-20 07:24 PM

soft and charming. very beautiful!!

very soft!!!

enjoyed with a smile.
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