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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Old dock posts Over shallow water— The heron’s eye . |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Huan Yi, Such a good description in so few words. I can picture it. Well done. Bobby |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Typically fine minimalism... wordpainted with a grand Zen-artist brush! Sustained applause! |
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Joe Crow Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 66Indiana |
Sorry for saying so but I don't get it. I may not be savvy to the finer points of writing poems and while it could be said that I am totally unaware of the rules if there are any I just don't understand writing about things that don't seem to matter. Could you please explain what that was supposed to convey? Joe |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thanks all Joe, /pip/Forum104/HTML/003453.html same thing . . . Look up the Japanese concepts of "sabi" and "mono no aware". Thanks again John . |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Even if one is not aware of (and/or cannot personally relate to) a paradigm (world view) built upon the aesthetic comfort garnered from the acceptance (and mourning) of transience... one should simply be able to recognize and appreciate (as Bobby Jordan put it) fine imagery painted in the least number of words! continuing applause for this 'penning!' |
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Joe Crow Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 66Indiana |
Huan, Faded Mailpouch weathered red barn the weary traveller remembers or Child speak the Emperor wears no clothes... maybe Radiant pearls she knows his thoughts another child is born. I'm still not sure you could call that poetry but only the last contains any religious undertones. Joe |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Huan Yi, Thank you. A drink of fossil water From an artesian well in Ohio. I'm not certain now I can remember ever being so thirsty. |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear Joe Crow, The first one is poetry. I've got a smoking crater left where my brain pan should be, and you made me like the experience. That's good enough for me. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thanks again for the interest Joe, I agree, the first is poetry. I would capitalize the first letter in each line. John |
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