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Open Poetry #41
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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2008-01-17 07:29 PM

    liberation

Harsh times and
  faces
dim by twilight,
with the smoke
of vanishing love…
in a world of
one color
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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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1 posted 2008-01-17 08:32 PM

"In a world of one color." I like this.
                               Ida
Bobby Jordan
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since 2007-08-13
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2008-01-17 08:52 PM

Secondhanddreampoet,

This is true.  To me, it would be improved by getting rid of the two lines:

"with the smoke
of vanishing love…"

Bobby
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2008-01-19 03:25 PM

Well said, dear Bruce, this is a sad situation indeed.
May we always know that Love IS, so that we can see the colors.

love
Margherita
TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
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4 posted 2008-01-19 03:30 PM

beautiful poem on philosophy. sigh...
Tomtoo

Have a great weekend, sir Bruce!!!
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