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Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

0 posted 2007-08-02 07:48 PM

Escape artist hawks ride restless winds
soaring above towering whispering pines,
seeking summer's feast.
A solo cottontail sits on the ground,
surrounded by undulating heat ripples,
pretending he is invisible
to my sideways glance.
Lucky for him I'm not some sidewinder-type
snaking low in the brush
in some desert choreography,
to be caught in a life-death dance of chance.
Beneath my feet the sages brush,
coaxing thistles and dried yarrow
to scratch my legs mercilessly
as I motion to the cottontail, beware the hawk.
A young doe steps tentatively from behind the barn,
surveys her two-legged pasture mate with trepidation,
then sends her new fawn bounding
off into the nearby sheltering woods.
It's a scene repeated thousands of times weekly;
but for these eyes,
it will always be
the moment of purest poetry.

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

1 posted 2007-08-02 07:55 PM

midnite~

~feeling you~~~

love the descriptions and the layers~~

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18

Posts 498

2 posted 2007-08-02 08:56 PM

Midnitesun,

Happy to see that you are back. Enjoyed the drama, flora, fauna and beauty of this writing!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2007-08-02 09:00 PM

listen, listen, to the alliteration...

wonderful!

But the imagery?

Priceless!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

4 posted 2007-08-02 09:47 PM

Belle, ArtSolstice, Sunshine....thank you for letting me share this with you!

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2007-08-02 10:07 PM

Immediately…from the title on…this ‘write’ is
most fine!

I am especially fond of:

“Escape artist hawks ride restless winds
soaring above towering whispering pines”;

“…sidewinder-type
‘snaking’ low in the brush
in some desert choreography(!)”;

and:

“beneath my feet the sages brush”;

If there really is such a thing as a poet’s
‘signature style’…I believe it is exemplified
by this write for this particular author?!

serious, long-sustained applause!
[a poetic ‘standing ovation’!!]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2007-08-02 10:41 PM

sigh, Bruce, I am so delighted you liked this!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-08-05 02:51 PM

Nice flow of thoughts...James

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2007-08-05 08:13 PM

but for these eyes,
it will always be
the moment of purest poetry''''.
Hey Kacy....

this just sums it all up....how beautiful to read...

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

9 posted 2007-08-05 08:55 PM

The imagery is simply wonderful!

Eric

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

10 posted 2007-08-05 09:18 PM

just came back for another read of this 'gem'!

most grand applause!!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

11 posted 2007-08-06 08:14 PM

Kacy dear Kacy, this leaves me with a sigh.....how very lovely this is!!

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