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Angels Fall
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since 2011-10-31
Posts 11
United States
0 posted 2011-10-31 10:44 PM


Anger overcomes a soul
It shatters, blown away by the winds of despair
Like a fiery flame it burns with hate
Hate is like a poison
It clouds the mind
Driving one insane
Hate leads to bloodshed
And that only breeds more hate
It's like a virus
Anyone can catch it
It's the darkness that surrounds the world
Lurking...
Waiting...
The cycle of hatred is never ending
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LaGraceLa
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since 2011-01-30
Posts 243
Minnesota, USA
1 posted 2011-11-05 10:42 AM

Again, this is a wonderful poem but it could be improved by something as simple as a few punctuations. I love the concept behind it and you captured it perfectly.
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