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Teen Poetry #9

Nearing Death

animecrazy71
Junior Member

since 2010-10-01

Posts 16
Pakistan

0 posted 2010-10-05 09:12 AM

Is this The Feeling,
The feeling of dying,

Breathing heavily with my chest out,
My eyes losing light, nearing a blackout,

Not Feeling any pat, slap, or punch,
As I slowly lose my sense of touch,

My ears rejecting every air wave,
As, for air, I vehemently crave,

The feeling of life, slipping away, into an abyss,
Then Suddenly, bursts light, bringing bliss,

Coming slowly to senses, I hear and see,
My friends striving to revive me,

Saved by friends, and The Higher Power,
I feel the luckiest man of the hour,

Now I carry with me, forever, The Feeling,
The feeling of almost Dying,

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

1 posted 2010-10-05 05:56 PM

Wow nice write!
I really like your choice of words, they bring a more mature sound to your poem. =]
Nice job.

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EmilyTheStrange
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animecrazy71
Junior Member

since 2010-10-01

Posts 16
Pakistan

2 posted 2010-10-06 09:22 AM

Thank You! i really appreciate it.....

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