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Open Poetry #45

Enter Thy Name

Elemental Warrior
Junior Member

since 2009-05-27

Posts 20
North Carolina

0 posted 2009-06-15 11:48 AM

Enter Thy Name

Enter thy name
Set forth the tide ring
Drink upon whose cup
A poison, centering the end

Let go of silly worries
Concerns and grudges
Breathe in my soul
I will restore you.

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

1 posted 2009-07-02 09:57 PM

some heavy writing! strong last line, made me think a bit.

In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

2 posted 2009-07-02 11:28 PM

first, welcome to PiP...nice write & much wisdom in these lines:

"Let go of silly worries
Concerns and grudges
Breathe in my soul
I will restore you."

...no restoration without reformation...nicely crafted

Elemental Warrior
Junior Member

since 2009-05-27

Posts 20
North Carolina

3 posted 2009-07-06 05:54 PM

actually this isn't my first, look around on Open Forum 45 and 44 also dark poetry and you'll find more from me...if you are interested

peace flows into our lives

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