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OldPoet
Member

since 2009-06-30

Posts 112
The Left Coast

0 posted 2009-07-18 11:29 PM

"And every time I've held a rose
It seems I only felt the thorns,
And so it goes" - Billy Joel

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2009-07-19 02:15 AM

Interesting write, Oldpoet.
Ida

OldPoet
Member

since 2009-06-30

Posts 112
The Left Coast

2 posted 2009-07-19 02:35 AM

You know, Ida, I once knew a very wealthy and self-possessed woman who was wont to express her complete and utter boredom by telling those around her, "That's interesting."

Thanks for your comment.

"And every time I've held a rose
It seems I only felt the thorns,
And so it goes" - Billy Joel

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-07-19 09:30 AM

Yo OldPoet,

I'd try to do something about the forced rhymes in this write.

Bobby

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

4 posted 2009-07-19 02:00 PM

I enjoyed this.

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2009-07-19 02:36 PM

I think Ida's right - I think this is interesting (and not because I am bored - if your poetry bored me, I would not wait so long for it to load. You wreck havoc on those of us with dial up). Anyway, this reminds me of Alaska and the villages up north.

I was waiting for the last two lines to end though and am still not sure if you ended on with two lines or if the poem stopped loading. That was a little disconcerting.

Otherwise, I enjoyed this interesting (grins) poem.

A

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

6 posted 2009-07-19 03:24 PM

I think Ida and Alison are right! This is a very interesting poem. And, there is no boredom here.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2009-07-19 07:53 PM

I am sorry you took offence at my comment Oldpoet. "Interesting" is a good thing in my way of thinking. I could have said it was uninteresting. There are many "interesting" poets on this site who write wonderful poetry so I am never bored. Not rich or self-possessed either. Sorry.
Ida

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