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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2011-01-10 05:59 PM

and as they took
that man away
the reason for
her existence

I heard her fear

I saw her cries

her pain was
...astounding

and in that moment
the fear had set in
the fear of giving
one's self without
any hesitation
I saw the power
one can have
over another
a thing called
     "love"
the day
my mother
had laid my
   father
      to rest.

-Trina.

When you decide to walk away- walk away. Don't look back, In that moment you'll lose trust and faith- in yourself.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2011-01-10 06:08 PM

an earnest and honest tribute...extremely well written...thank you for sharing...stole my breath at the ending

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2011-01-10 06:23 PM

Exceptional portrayal of emotions here Trina.

"the fear of giving
one's self without
any hesitation"

That's just a classic line!

Eric

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

3 posted 2011-01-10 06:26 PM

very beautifully written with a powerful delivery...freat poem!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

4 posted 2011-01-10 07:03 PM

Amazing, Chamorrita. Simply awesome writing.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

5 posted 2011-01-10 07:10 PM

This poem brings back memories of an aunt of mine. She tried to crawl into the casket with her husband. What a sad, sad day.

You wrote this so well, Trina.

Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake!

incwrite
Member

since 2010-12-31

Posts 55
new york

6 posted 2011-01-10 08:00 PM

brings back so many memories of loved ones that I have lost..
you captured that feeling

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

7 posted 2011-01-10 11:19 PM

..yes, i must agree..you captured
that feeling of extreme loss..>>spiros

mikeandrew
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since 2010-11-18

Posts 198

8 posted 2011-01-11 12:35 PM

great poem i enjoyed it.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

9 posted 2011-01-11 04:18 AM

Steavenr, Eric, Faith, Garapan, Jerry, Inc', Spiros, Mike- Thanx.

-Trina
Be thankful for every person who has caused you pain. In that moment, they became your assistant of growth.

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

10 posted 2011-01-11 11:04 PM

This left an impression upon me. Nice work.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

11 posted 2011-01-12 07:53 AM

Hopefully a good one? Thanx Earl.

-Trina
Be thankful for every person who has caused you pain. In that moment, they became your assistant of growth.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

12 posted 2011-01-12 08:30 AM

excellent heart wrenching write Trina.
Lori

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

13 posted 2011-01-12 10:07 AM

I ache for your mother's pain. My family and friends thought I was going to jump into my beloved horse's grave when he was buried 8 and three quarter years ago.

Owl

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

14 posted 2011-01-13 03:43 AM

A very sensitive and touching write, Trina.
Ida

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

15 posted 2011-06-26 09:48 PM

Your poem touched my heart in ways I can't begin to express... Thanx for sharing... ~Coco~

martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

16 posted 2011-06-27 01:53 AM

powerful

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

17 posted 2011-06-27 10:30 PM

The funerals of someone who is much loved is a very tragic thing. I have seen women try to get inside the coffin with their husband. Horrible pain she must have had.

~ Man who wants pretty nurse, must be patient. ~

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