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Open Poetry #47

As I Walked Away

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

0 posted 2011-01-11 06:15 PM

and as I
walked away
I could feel
your heart bleeding
yes, take that
that rage, and
feed off of it
heal your heart
that precious heart.
which still misses
a piece, somewhere
the piece that
I keep
   I cherish
       I love, still

I couldn't
    look back
cause you'd see
all the pain
  I felt
     as I
walked away

-Trina
Be thankful for every person who has caused you pain. In that moment, they became your assistant of growth.

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2011-01-11 06:30 PM

Tough love. Or maybe in this case, final tough love.

Always love your poetry, Trina. Always.

Suicidal twin kills sister by mistake!

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

2 posted 2011-01-11 08:48 PM

We bring on our own broken hearts sometimes by presuposing. Liked this. Latearrival

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2011-01-11 09:37 PM

there is a great poignancy in this...loved the simplicity and pathos of:

"I keep
I cherish
I love, still"

...a very moving write

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-01-11 10:01 PM

i agree...this is very moving...i like it alot

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

5 posted 2011-01-12 07:55 AM

Aww, Thanx Jerry.

Indeed we do, LateA Thanx
Steavenr, Thanx.
Faith, Thanx.

-Trina
Be thankful for every person who has caused you pain. In that moment, they became your assistant of growth.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2011-01-12 08:36 AM

Trina, I liked the energy of this piece. Your work is always powerful.
Lori

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