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Open Poetry #47

East Carolina

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

0 posted 2011-07-30 02:08 PM

Here you can smell tar
from an ocean beach
a hundred miles away,

and here brightness fades
beneath the shadow
of a lone, stunted pine.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2011-07-30 04:07 PM

This leaves me with a feeling of longing... and maybe loss, thinking of the smell of a clean ocean breeze. There's always California

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

2 posted 2011-07-30 05:09 PM

Your poem sounds as if it's referring to the oil spill.
Well done,
ebonygirl

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2011-07-31 01:03 AM

I hate that the tar can be smelled, but I long for the beach. Nothing like a North Carolina beach. Good poem.

A

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

4 posted 2011-08-02 04:09 PM

Thanks for the kind comments all.

I was thinking a little and decided maybe the smell was recalled from some Redneck Riviera, and not from a wild beach per se. Anyway, tar and pines and sandy soil and sun...

Poets do not shoot fish in barrels, we woo them---and the barrels, too.

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