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Open Poetry #48

Chrome freeway

ponderthepoetorrsx
Member

since 2011-06-25

Posts 284
U.S , Ca

0 posted 2013-02-02 12:23 PM

Theres a chrome a freeway,
Oh
Theres a chrome freeway,
Yes theres a chrome free.

Will you?
Will you?
Ride with me?

Up the hill and down the mountain,
Past the water fountain

To where
To where

Theres a chrome freeway,
A chrome freeway,

O Will you ride with me?
O will you ride with me?

ride with me
Into the sunset
Past purple mountains and down into the sea.

Oh,
Oh I know there is a place,
(Oh theres a place)
(oh theres a place)

Somewhere out there

Theres a chrome freeway
A chrome freeway

Will you
Will you
Ride with me?

OLIAS
Senior Member

since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

1 posted 2013-02-05 04:31 PM

This is like a catchy chorus with a bridge... Maybe, but I feel needs more meat on the bone, a verse or two could help a lot . I liked.

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