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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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As Did I and I loved her till Death himself asked forgiveness for thinking her time was near, and all the Gods of our ancestors knelt in prayer that her life might be spared, but it was not to be and I watched as her soul slowly seeped from her pores, the glow leaving her skin sallow and pale lifeless in the end. until Death knelt by her side and cried . . . as did I. © wesley james beard, jr. NOTE: This, in actuality refers to the death of my grandmother, something I had been trying to address in writing since 1980. jimmy |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Heartbreaking realism, man. To have to stand and watch as breath leaves the body of a much loved one is agony untold. Impossible to relate the agony to another person. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
This is awsome Jimmy!!~L |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
so sad and heartfelt, put into words, the hardest thing to do, apart from experiencing the feelings that they were written about. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Jim, as I read this I just knew it was for an older woman,perhaps your Mother as both she and your grandmother were precious I know I had you right. Very well written, Jo |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Jim, as I read this I just knew it was for an older woman,perhaps your Mother as both she and your grandmother were precious I know I had you right. Very well written, Jo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Jimmy, well hello there, hope your doing well....this was gut wrenching, and yet, such a beautiful way of imortalizing our mothers, fathers, grandparents...enjoyed... |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jimmy, I have been silenced by my Mom's death. I felt this to my bones. A |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Some powerful images, superbly written. Time surely has brought about this fine piece. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Okay, so I have found it hard not to get completely wrapped up in some of the things you write, Jimmy, because you always have that tag on them reminding us that they may not be real. It gets hard sometimes to allow yourself to "feel" for something that's been labeled with a "do not feel" warning. I point this out not as any type of criticism, but merely because I find it intriguing that this piece is the complete opposite here. I love the way you have personified Death, actually having him moved to tears in this. It exemplifies the actual "real" grief you obviously felt and passes it on to the reader in a very powerful way. Nicely written. Michael |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Michael . . . most of what I write, with very few exceptions, is written around actual occurrences, though not all my own, personal, active experience, meaning I wasn't personally involved. But, basically, all of what I write is based on something, or someone's REAL experience. I get subject matter from things in life around me, whether it be an obituary, wedding, seeing, hearing, talking with others, etc... meaning, I put into words what I think myself or others would feel in a set situation. So the disclaimer is to quiet the many, many comments & questions from the caring about the state of my "personal" psyche, because I try to write emotion in a way that touches, and pulls one in to another's life. Sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I started using the disclaimer attachment a couple years ago when I found myself too often having to answer or explain that something was "not about me". Also, I seldom say if something is from my own life experience. (Still covered by the disclaimer . . . lol). I will always appreciate your read, comments and questions and hope this gives you a better idea of where I "come from". . . All in all, as long as someone "enjoys" the read . . . I'm happy. Jimmy |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
No worries, jimmy. I always understood where the disclaimer came from, I just found it purely ironic that on this you stated the personal nature to it and while that opened to door for an emotional, supportive outreach I was inclined moreso to applaud the writing itself. Made me feel awkward I suppose. Anyhow, I love your writing and the fact that you can move me like you do emotionally is a testament in itself to how good it is. Kudos friend. Michael |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
three brothers of mine passed away in three years.. I've still yet to come to terms not sure if i ever will be able to Thank you for sharing this Jimmy.. it reminded me of my own grandmother and how much i've missed her so.. bless the writers of the world.. they're little alarm clocks of vision and memoir |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
So sad, but wonderful tribute to a loved one, Jimmy. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
fine writing...james |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Simply GORGEOUS, even in pain. had to read this twice  be well ~d Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Jwesley, I am unable to adequately to express how your poem has touched me. Of late, I've really missed my best friend, my husband,and tonight found myself crying. Consolation comes from knowing he left in contentedness and strength. Your poem makes me appreciate the kindness that Death paid him. I empathize with you over your grandmother's passing and understand how it take years to write what needs to be written. Excellent writing! misc |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This touched the very depths of me. Exquisite! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
She was a beautiful person and I loved (still do) her very much as did all who met her. Thank you all for the thoughts you've shared. jimmy |
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