I'm Sorry I Stole the One You Love

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I'm Sorry I Stole the One You Love

Lynn
Member

since 1999-09-20

Posts 316
Jasper, Alabama U.S.A.

0 posted 1999-09-20 09:48 PM

I'm sorry
I have stolen
the one
you love.

The one you
wanted for
only yourself.

Forgive me,
he was just
too perfect to
let go to
waste.

[This message has been edited by Lynn (edited 09-21-1999).]

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

1 posted 1999-09-21 03:01 AM

I cringed at the title but I think the poem is well done.

minor point: should be 'too perfect' unless your shooting for a double meaning here: 'perfect' and someone you want to perfect. If so I might think about rewriting that stanza a bit.

Good job,
Brad

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