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HM3
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since 1999-07-15
Posts 169
TX
0 posted 1999-07-18 01:38 PM

Poetry in motion
Thoughts spinning 'round
Words of emotion
Feelings falling down
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Ohme
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 816
Texas
1 posted 1999-07-18 01:48 PM

I see more to this than you gave us, HM3. I would like to see earlier stanzas and then reach this as a conclusion. What do you think? Could it be?
Daniel2
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since 1999-07-13
Posts 28
Waterloo, Ontario, Canada
2 posted 1999-07-18 02:08 PM

How about stronger words for feelings and falling? Eg. Terrors crashing.
I think there could be more here, too.
HM3
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since 1999-07-15
Posts 169
TX
3 posted 1999-07-18 03:15 PM

Hmmm. I was wondering if it was 'nuff said or a what are you saying really. Guess it needs work. I'll see what I can do.
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