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Critical Analysis #1
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J.B.SR
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since 2000-01-04
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0 posted 2000-01-05 05:48 PM





[This message has been edited by J.B.SR (edited 01-07-2000).]
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Tim Gouldthorp
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since 2000-01-03
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1 posted 2000-01-05 09:48 PM

The sentiment is clear, and it flows nicely.  Maybe consider changing 'them' to 'those' in the 9th line.
jaxjoy
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since 1999-12-14
Posts 112
Texas
2 posted 2000-01-06 12:17 PM

Beautiful poem...very touching
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