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Poem Without a Name

Snooganzmeister32
Member

since 2001-07-17

Posts 67
Cali, USA

0 posted 2001-08-07 10:34 PM

Hold these
Hands that
Reach for
You...
Hear my
Whispering
Voice...
My blood...
Shall reach you...

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

1 posted 2001-08-10 04:16 PM

Proper punctuation and grammer would help this to become a good short free form poem.IMHO of course.

paladin

Jeen
Member

since 2000-06-07

Posts 91

2 posted 2001-08-13 11:02 AM

Good imagery, but I need to read more information in between these lines.

To me, the verses and ideas are not complete.

A little more work could make this a good piece.

Jeen

Abby
Junior Member

since 2001-08-12

Posts 12
Texas

3 posted 2001-08-13 01:25 PM

I'm sorry, but I am a bit confused???
I think with a few more lines/description, I would be able to set the scene in my mind. I did like the first half and thought it was rather good.

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