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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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(I wrote this tonight online in a matter of about 2 minutes...not title and needs some brushing up) Soft mist falls upon my skin And I am coming to your shore I'm adrift upon your waves Wanting only to have more Shall I dare the waters edge Be this a chance I care to take Guide me softly towards your shore And rock me gently in your wake ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Not bad for two minutes - when you decide the title, let me know and I'll change it for you.... I can't do that in five minutes, never mind two....  |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
That's a cool start there Hoot!!! Hope to know the title soon!! Thanks ------------------ "Is she living in a dream, Is she playing make-believe???" Justbleu |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Just and Nan...actually I was hoping someone on here might give a suggestion where that is concerned ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Homecoming? ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I kind of like the ring to that one Elizabeth I had thought possibly "In your Wake" ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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johnt300 Member
since 1999-09-12
Posts 214san diego, ca. |
Hoot, Just excellent. Short but sweet. Very vivid for me, too. Tyson |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Glad you liked it, Hoot. This may sound corny, but the poem is beautiful no matter what the title is. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Lady Hoot: Don't you just love it when they come to you like that? Sounds great as it is. Title? How about "High Tide" or "Lovers Tide" ? |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! Two minutes! What talent! Very lovely! ------------------ Denise |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Just two minutes of your time, You come up with beautiful rhyme. I can sit and think all day, But two minutes? There's no way! (that was about 1) haha, you can tell can't ya? LOL I like Andrew's suggestion...Lovers Tide... Another great one Hoot! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone Nice suggestions Andrew ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Hoot' I would suggest " Lost In Your Mist " , but what the hell do I know ? ------------------ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh...very nice Dr. Moose....thank you ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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