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Open Poetry #1

Street corner scene

Starfish
Junior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 34
New Zealand

0 posted 1999-07-20 05:20 AM

a couple laugh,
look inside each other
smile,
blind to
the street,
the traffic,
passing.

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 1999-07-20 09:44 AM

Welcome! This is a good, simple poem. Says a lot in a few words! I look forward to reading more from you.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 1999-07-20 10:10 AM

Nice, this one brings a very sweet visual image to my mind when I read it...short, sweet and not a wasted word.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Starfish
Junior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 34
New Zealand

3 posted 1999-07-20 06:57 PM

Thank you Poet devine and hoot_owl_rn for your supportive comments. This poem is a favorite of mine as I like its simplicity, thanks again.

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 1999-07-20 07:21 PM

"look inside each other" is a wonderful choice of words.

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

5 posted 1999-07-20 07:25 PM

Minimalism at it's best is a hard thing to do. Good job! And, welcome into the fold.

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