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The Fine Line
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The Fine Line |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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The Fine Line I crossed the line with you now I'm falling in despair. I purposely chose the fine line now I sit like a corpse in this chair. I blast myself for thinking you could, or would change. Being a sponge, and a conniver is your only visible range. You wiped away all of my kindness, now you expect more. I feel like a hostage agonizing all the whys, and why-nots of human reflectiveness. |
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Sue Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 383France |
I read this several times, I think it is worth learning by heart. It is beautifully written and so, so recognisable for me. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lost dreamer, this one is not lost on me. Good one. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Sue: Thank You for your response. I wrote this about my brother-in-law who I keep thinking will change. Seymour Tabin: Thank You for your response, it's much appreciated. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Dreamer, you have a wonderful ability to pack a lot of emotion in few words. It is a gift and you excel in it. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Very well done! I have been there, hoping a change would come! Some people tho'- never know! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Balladeer: Thank You so much for the compliment, I just write as I feel, I guess sometimes it really comes across. WhtDove: Thank You for your compliment, one day maybe I will learn, and spread my energies in a more apprecitive direction. |
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