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Ergo Est |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas 
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Frustration of this fatuation Stems from the miles that lie between us Leaving me disconsolate in its wake There's a risk I'll gladly take Situation to change my location Waning days have got me in a rush Love will lose a ton of dust Given you have my heart a shake Termination of our hermitation Consolidation of our habitation Clad in white I see you blush Nuptial vows we'll someday take 10-13-99 Alicat the twitterpated satiated kilted kitty |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
We are... I loved hearing you read this, and I loved reading it myself. Welcome back to the forums, sug.  [This message has been edited by Satiate (edited 10-16-1999).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful! ------------------ Denise |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
How beautiful ... I couldn't help but smile as I read this ... thank you for sharing it. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Geesh - you've written a great poem, and here I sit analyzing the rhyme scheme - I really like this one - It's kinda like a petite sestina, don't ya think? a-b-c c-a-b b-c-a a-b-c Awesome!!!  |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
satiate: therefore, we are dsnyder: thanks nocht: thanks again...i was smiling like a loon when writing this at work nan: hehehe...tickled pink you critiqued this one, but you missed something...the 'a' line contains two 'a's aabc caab bcaa aabc in trochaic tetrameter, positioned in tercets gotcha  Alicat the persnikitty |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This one makes me smile...congrats you two!! ------------------ This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
nr 22 ? |
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