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Teen Poetry #2

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Smore
Member

since 2000-01-24

Posts 67
el paso

0 posted 2000-02-15 09:11 PM

You must have been Heaven sent
Someone God graciously lent

Something I could never keep
But I fell in love so deep

I think about you all the time
Love like this should be a crime

If you could feel the way I do
It'd be the sweetest dream come true.

Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love.

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

1 posted 2000-02-15 09:19 PM

I'm sure everyone who reads this will have the same reaction as me: "oh yes, I've been there!" You perfectly described falling in love and i commend you. Your references to Heaven made the poem come alive. Good work.

"The bullets you bite from the pain you request, you're finding harder to digest" -Collective Soul

Anglefire
New Member

since 2000-02-12

Posts 7
somewhere real close

2 posted 2000-02-15 09:56 PM

you should write some more i enjoyed that poem. i have felt like that a long time ago and just felt like that again last night.
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Jer
Member

since 1999-12-02

Posts 443
USA

3 posted 2000-02-16 07:12 PM

Good job. The rhyme scheme and meter was done nicely. Great topic, yes I think we all have been in this position at one time or another.

"WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler

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