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Graveyard of Angels |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA 
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Cemetary of the dead Stone pillars so old A graveyard of angels And stories untold Withered flowers Willows that weep Six feet under The dead are asleep A place of solitude And restless souls This city of angels For whom the bell tolls Time passes slowly The seasons go by As the sun goes down The moon comes nigh Scurring shadows Whispering breeze Celestial voices And screaming trees So many gravestones So cold and so dark Surrounded by death The souls embark On a heavenly journey Through time and through space A Psalm of Psalm's A feeling of grace Under the moonlight The angels dance Leaving the dead In a peaceful trance The sun will rise The day will begin The graveyard of angels Is quiet again If you want to walk with God, you've got to go His way! |
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thebob Junior Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 15 |
His way is the only way to receive His grace and our salvation. i really liked the poem. bob |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
hoho, dark and somber, i like it, i espcially like the allusion to john donne's "meditation 17" (for whom the bell tolls) rich-pa |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This is really well written. Excellent expression! I had actually started a similar poem called God's Garden. Yours is better and mine is now shelved. Rarely do I print a copy of a poem but I have printed yours. Good work! Danny [This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 02-23-2000).] |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
I really like this poem, excellent work. I felt as if I were indeed sitting in the dark cold graveyard! |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Wow! Thought provoking in the very least! Good work! Vreni |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I loved your poem. It may have been dark and all, but the way you worded it and my faith and all made it mean so much more than what some people would think. Good job, and I hope to see more of your wonderful poems soon. ~Kristi Lynn |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Stunning. The way you melded the two worlds together is wonderful. Great imagery, I loved the darkness. I'll be looking for more! *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
I'm still trying to catch my breath! You are truly a talented writer, and you are using that talent to inspire so many people. Great poem! |
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Gadget28 Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33Miami, Florida United States |
Wow this was great! I'm glad there are still people out there who keep in touch with God!  |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA |
Thanks a lot everyone. Your words inspire me to write more. I've just started writing and it's so great. I appreciate your feedback. As for you (Danny Holloway) finish your poem. I don't believe mine is better. In fact who care's. I'm not here to compete. Just to write and have fun. You should do the same. You'd be surprised what could happen if you just believe in yourself. Trevor If you want to walk with God, you've got to go His way! |
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Sara Junior Member
since 2000-02-24
Posts 27LaCrosse WI, United States |
This was an amazing poem to read. Rather on the darker side but it is also very beautiful. Very good job. |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
I was drawn to this by the title and now feel compelled to reply by the poem. Darkly beautiful, and lyrical. Enjoyed this one a lot. A writer's soul is on paper etched. In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Excelent job! This was well written and just an all around great read. I really like the 7th and 9th stanzas. They were the best. Keep up the good work. "WRITING IS EASY. ALL YOU DO IS STARE AT A BLANK SHEET OF PAPER UNTIL DROPS OF BLOOD FORM ON YOUR FOREHEAD." Gene Fowler |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
WOW that was juss wonderrful i loved it soo much eeach n every stanza!i m gonna take a print out of yer poem n kkeep it in ma diary! lolfaith |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
trevor: darkly enchanting... i really like the final stanza as well as the lines "A Psalm of Psalm's/ A feeling of grace"... not sure why... i just dig it... keep up the incredible work... sincerely, jerome the mysterious priest Disarm you with a smile And leave you like they left me here To wither in denial The bitterness of one who's left alone --[billy corgan]-- |
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