Teen Poetry #2 |
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Hey Stranger! (please respond) |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
hey stranger, where have you been? we used to be best friends. was is you or me who went away? you said you would be here to stay. so where did you go? or should i already know? you went nowhere, but it was me disappeared. the truth is i'm afraid, of again being betrayed. my heart cries out for you and i know you long for me too! yet still i stay away continuing to be afraid. i am mostly afraid of me. what exactly do i mean? honestly, i don't know, but i'm becoming my worst foe. i need you now, i don't know how to go on in a life of fear. fearing you won't be so near the next time i mess up, behind me when i can't catch up. only you know all my fears, the endless nights with endless tears. and as you look at me only you can see the pain i have inside, the feelings i try to hide. i will learn to love and trust again, in the mean time, please, just be my friend. ******* i wrote this a while back, but it has never applied to my life as much as it does now...i don't know if my heart will heal (or if it should) but i know that it kills me not having this person in my life...and it's only been a day. ******* |
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emptyness Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 95mobile,Ala,USA |
great poem pharon i know how it feels to be away from people you love and it is prob the most painful feeling in the world but usually they come back sooner or later i hope this person returns to you soon "scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a good poem. Your heart will heal but everything takes time...patience is of a virtue. ~AF~ |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This poem flows like the lyric of a song. The rhyme is real good and the expression jumps out of the words. Well done. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
thanx everybody for responding ![]() emptyness: i hope he comes back to his senses too!!! b/c it's really killing me. anonymous: yes, my heart will heal(someday)but i'm not even sure if it should, ya know? sometimes i think maybe it's not supposed to. danny: thanx ![]() |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
I think your poem is excellent. I hope you will find the strength to go on without this person if you must, and I hope you can eventually find another so special. Very vivid expression of your loss. *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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