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Teen Poetry #2

Absence of devotion....

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-03-28 11:55 PM

So i admit i got lost among emotions
and i
repent..the absence of devotion
and i have spent the 19 years
living within reason..thriving and leaving
im a watcher..i live in wait
proving and accusing
everyone of making..all my honest mistakes

Mellon Collie
Junior Member

since 2000-03-25

Posts 49
united states of america

1 posted 2000-03-29 02:13 AM

dear jackal,

a friend of mine told me to look up your work when i came to the forum. it was definately worth my time

this is an excellent piece. the verse is irregular, but the flow is spectacular. i love it. i'll keep an eye out for you in the future.

sincerely,
the beautiful freak

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2000-03-29 03:55 AM

This is a good poem here Jackal. In very few words you capture the reader and hold them to your every word.

Well done.

~AF~

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