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Two Become One.... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
5-7-5-7-7 And two become one.... She melts into his soft arms. He caresses her; In the bliss of this moment, Love unites their hearts and souls. This is my first Tanka. I posted it in the Corner Pub and Gene told me all my form errors and that, so I've edited it and this is the final thing....also posted in the Corner Pub. I wanted to see what you guys think of it too! "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight." |
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natalie Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 56 |
very sweet poem, I like the final touch, it' s really very sweet, I like it, natalie... |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
I love this poem! It has such wonderful expression in it. Lindsay |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Thanks for your replies, Natalie and Lindsay.I'm glad you liked it! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight." |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very nice. So simply said. |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
Lizzie~ I like. I'm glad I got to make a couple of stops in here today. Love ya lots. Kristi Lynn  |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
ah very nice, so a tanka is 5-7-5-7-7??? Just wondering cuase I always like to learn new forms of poetry. Anywho, that if VERY beautiful, I think I'll share it with Stacy, she should like it very much. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Very nice, ESP ^_^ tanka.. I have never come across that form of writing.. I don't think... ^_^ Yes.. u r a talented writer.. Lynne |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very soft and beautiful work. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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