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Love Hurts |
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Amanda_C_123 New Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1 |
The Way The way he sits and looks at me, makes me feel like flying. The way he laughs at me makes my heart drop. The was he puts knifes through my heart and makes me want to cry. The was he hurts me like know one else, makes me want to die. The way he makes me feel like crap, and kills me with his words. I don't think he realizes how much he makes me hurt. The way his words mean so much, the way he rocks my world. The way he makes the butterflies sore, in my stomache, when he walks by. The way he makes me laught but usually makes me cry. Oh, the way he makes me love him no one will ever know the way. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
first off I'd like to welcome you to passions, I do so hope you enjoy your stay. Second, it is a very nice poem, tho it has a very sad theme, I might suggest however, that a bit of it seems not to flow with the general rythem. Anywho, very sad, I do hope that it all turn out all right, if you ever need a friend to talk to, I'm more than willing to listen. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
Welcome to Passions. I hope we can see more of your work! Excellent poem..it is so sad but very good! If you want to talk just let me know. Lindsay  |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very well-said, and I must say, very appropriate title. I can feel your pain here, cause I've experienced such feelings as well. Great job by the way!  *~Meredith~* *There is no destination where we are Please take me somewhere far Far away from this world of mine* (by me) |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Firstly welcome to Passions! Secondly, this is a good poem to enter in with. This poem holds so much truth in what makes us churn about an ex. Nice work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Welcome to Passions!! This is a great first post...so full of emotion. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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