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The Nightly Torture... please read
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The Nightly Torture... please read |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
The Nightly Torture I sit, so still there in my bed Thoughts of fear racing through my head Nightmares making me wish I was dead I scream, but no one hears me... Shivers go up my spine in fright Tossing and turning all through the night If only you could make things right And tame the monsters that I see... These beasts, they come up through the floor Through the walls and my locked door, "Please, go away! Haunt me no more!" And yet they stay, ignoring my plea... They stop their moans; I hear the rain Every drop makes me wince in pain It begins to drive me insane Out jumps my heart, as crashes the tree... Then all is quiet, deathly still Just as a lion before the kill I shut my eyes, the fear does fill And I am left alone. I flee. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
this is great!!!!! why am i the first to reply to this??!?!!?! i love it!! the way in which you wrote it...the rhyming structure...the nightly torture and fear concept! great!!! hopefully when this is bumped up more people will read it!! Bec  "whenever you are feeling alone...i'll take your hand in mine and we will walk together" |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
hmmm, very nice poem, tho not something that u should read right before going to bed... I think it is going to give me nightmares..... Hmmm, well I'll just think of my Stacy angel  "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Ok, I can tell you why I haven't read this yet...firstly it wasn't here before I went to bed and secondly...please read....doesn't do anything for me! Very good poem though! Next time, please avoid the please read thing. That goes for everyone! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Carly Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 17Michigan, USA |
I guess I knew that I shouldn't have done that please read thing... Oh well. I actually kinda scared myself when I wrote it. Thanks so much for your replies! ~Carly |
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MerritW Junior Member
since 2000-04-18
Posts 33Texas |
Good work. That's a really freaky poem! I loved it. *Love is the only thing that keeps me sane* (Sue Townsend) |
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