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Merlot New Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 7 |
A simple minded type of person, who would only like to be amused, who doesn't know the meaning of cheating away a life to choose. Enters the evilness of truth, unveiling a world of new, occurrances subdue. Ideas and realities take form, outlining a coward to be used repeatedly over again and again. So thick in the skull, a dense mind not open to a few obvious and mindless changes. If only the mundane and ordinary would not prove to be this bland hue of colors taken in and changed only to protect you. But once expanded thoughts arise its hard to go back without diguise to hide a distraught glance of a world taken by chance. Inviting others to come along, if only they knew how to chant the song, to unfold the differences between right and wrong. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is a really deep piece merlot. I enjoyed reading it though for the perfect expression and emotion displayed throughout. I particulary liked the line, "So thick in the skull,a dense mind not open to a few obvious and mindless changes." For some reason I read this and went, WOW! Great work. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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son of man Member
since 2000-04-25
Posts 125 |
your poem is hard for me to follow, but i can tell some thought and feeling had to emerge, possibly from a great depth, your poem is well worded and i enjoyed reading it despite my shortcomings. |
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4eva_at_heart Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 238 |
wow! very good piece. it flowed so poetically...i guess because it is beautiful poetry  Welcome to Passions hope to see more of your work very soon Bec  i never thought i'd die alone, i laughed the loudest who'd have known? i traced the cord back to the wall, no wonder it was never plugged in at all i took my time, i hurried up the choice was mine i didn't think enough I'm too depressed to go on, you'll be sorry when i'm gone I never conquered, rarely came 16 just held such better days Days when i still felt alive, we couldn't wait to get outside The world was wide, too late to try The tour was over i'd survived I couldn't wait till i got home, to pass the time in my room alone I never thought i'd die alone, another six months I'll be unknown Give all my things to my friends, you'll never set foot in my room again You'll close it off, board it up Remember the time i spilled the cup Of apple juice in the hall, please tell mum this is not her fault I never conquered, rarely came But tomorrow holds such better days Days when i can still feel alive, when i can't wait to get outside The world was wide, the time goes by The tour is over, i've survived I can't wait till i get home, to pass the time in my room alone 'Adam's Song' Blink 182 |
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