Teen Poetry #2 |
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Daddy,Please Pick Me Up |
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Michele New Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 9 |
Daddy, Pease Pick Me Up I lay there, my face in the dirt, Struggling to get up, But,oh,I’m so hurt. I’ve been trying to get up, But I keep getting pushed back down. I get some hope and try again, But I keep coming face to face with the ground. Finally, I look up to my Father, Daddy, Daddy, I’ve fallen again, I’ve tried so hard to get up, But I just can’t win. I can’t fight anymore, I just want to give up. I’m just so tired, Daddy, please pick me up. Oh, my child, come here my precious one. You don’t know how long I’ve waited for those words. If I could have earlier, That’s exactly what I would have done. But, Daddy, you’re so big, And I’m so small. You didn’t help me, I had to do it all. Oh, my child, I knew they would break your heart. I knew that your world would fall apart. I knew that you and your family would fight. And I know that you cry a lot at night. So many times I’ve had to close my eyes. I’m still with you, But I can’t watch you fall for Satan’s lies. I’ve wanted to pick you up, But I’ve given you your own choice. I call to you, But you choose to listen to the wrong voice. But, finally, you have called on me. Now I can hold you in my arms. And if you will trust me, I will keep you safe from harm. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Michele, this is beautifully written and a true inspiration. Hope it gets a lot of responses. dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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the dark angel Junior Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 37 |
Michelle, that was a truly amazing piece of poetry. It totally describes what every child goes through with their father. Keep up the good writing the dark angel -x- |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Beautiful!!!! Although i can hardly relate (myself hardly knowing my father), but i do recognize a great poem and this one definately falls into that catagory!!! ---------------------- "Life is ours, we live it our way, all these things i just don't say, and nothing else matters." |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Very nice religious poem! Beautifully written... * * * Oh, my child, I knew they would break your heart. I knew that your world would fall apart. I knew that you and your family would fight. And I know that you cry a lot at night. * * * Poignant and beautiful. Very nice. ...Daysleeper... "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller. "But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin." "In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy." "Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World" |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is wonderfully written and I am very happy for you to have "found" your father again. Love and hugs, Lizzie ![]() "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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