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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Shaking hands scribble down long though out words I repeat to myself this is so obsurd My bleeding heart releases tears of fire While I sit back and fight with all desire Will you be here soon or do I have to keep waiting? Inside my mind i continue debating You hurt me deeply and I don't know why Why do I still keep coming back-reaching for the sky? I've spent so many nights crying myself to sleep But still your voice and presence I will keep I hope that when you get here you'll definately see You'll see that my love is stronger and always will be I'll take you far away into that wonderful sea The place to where only I hold the key Green grass and flowing rivers of blue So beautiful you have no clue Blooming flowers and swaying trees Biettersweet wind kissing my lips in the breeze This is all so wonderful for just you and me But now you are starting to fade-what is happening? To my heart this is all so saddening And my utopia slides away along with you And I have to awake now and live my day cold and blue |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi SP, This longing kills me deep inside and everything seems to be in vain. Finally we realize we're doing nothing but building castles in air without any idea of whats going to happen to it. Do whatever you feel but don't give yourself too much. Sincerely A_L |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
A_L ~ thanks for your reply. UMM...I don't really know what to say because I am confused! I take it you did not like the poem?!?!? thanks for your honesty. I hope the thought occurred to you that I am in love with someone who no longer loves men back. I didn't know that was vain. I am confused by your reply if you could clarify it a little more it owuld help me to understand what you mean!! ~*~Jessica~*~ |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi I just said don't give yourself too much in love for you'll never know what you've lost until it's gone.Your honor,faith everything will be crushed. Sincerely A_L |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
To my heart this is all so saddening And my utopia slides away along with you And I have to awake now and live my day cold and blue My utopia slides away.......I love how you put that. Great poem Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Thanks for the reply Lucius! I like to hear what everyone thinks! especially what your favorite lines are...it gives me more inspiration! thanks again! Love Always~*~Jessica Lynn~*~ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I don't like to pick a fav line in any poem, because each line carries it's own signifigance to the whole. However, my fav thing about the poem was your description. I could see and feel everything. Your use of adjective painted it beautifuly. Jeremy |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
=0) Thanks Jeremy! I wrote this the other night while thinking about my ex and how much I love him. and how I would give anything to have him in my arms just one more time... |
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