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ILoveSrfrs Member
since 1999-11-14
Posts 69California |
I'm 13 and I've never written a poem like this, I have only written love poems before so I would appreciate any feedback you could give me on this, thanks! Also, what do you think I should title this one? Screams and Yells for help Insecure laughing Harsh words being thrown like darts Mournful tones High-pitched moans Cover my ears so I cannot hear Tears and tears of devestation Sad expressions Unsure looks Faces of pain Hurtful Stares Unknown Cares Cover my eyes so I cannot see Sobs of emotional destruction Yells for wrongs and rights Words being held in Talking back Words of hate Unknown fate Cover my mouth so I cannot speak |
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SweetStuff27 Junior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 10LA, California, USA |
It makes me feel sad and depressed because I feel this persons pain. It is a very well written, very expressive and detailed peice of work. And I also feel that the writer of the poem should chose the title, it makes it so much more meaningfull to themselves and others. |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
this is very expressive great work ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
I have to agree with everyone above, it is a very expressive, and great piece of work |
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