Red eclipses the means to your end...

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Red eclipses the means to your end...

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-01-27 02:20 AM

ive bled a line or two for you
it goes and comes
red eclipses and combines
with life
to make them want the reject
with no feeling too
siding with all the hateful things
just to prove the means to an end
the open daggers..my insides exposed
can be your meaningless excuse..
and your only friend

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

1 posted 2000-01-27 10:23 AM

ouch..that one really hit hoe, jackal...i can see where you're coming from! Good luck...

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member

since 1999-12-03

Posts 872
just about where I want to be

2 posted 2000-01-27 10:23 AM

i accidently posted the same message twice..so i edited it to say..KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK JACKAL!!

[This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 01-27-2000).]

poetry_kills
Senior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 549
new orleans

3 posted 2000-01-27 03:14 PM

jackal: this (the second of your poems i've seen) is just as well-written and effective as the last... very good job

and i hope to read more of your work soon...

sincerely,
jerome the boy with the catholic saxophone

A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

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