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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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As cherry blossoms obstruct senses aroma flows above leafy trees; those green trees with swaying buds and leaves. The gift of spring delights and thrills me. --- Alison [This message has been edited by Alison (06-03-2008 07:37 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
As cherry blossoms obstruct senses aroma flows above leafy trees; those green trees with swaying buds and leaves. The gift of spring delights and thrills me. Not bad at all, Alison! Clever to use assonance words (blossoms, senses. For a first try, you done good!  |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You know, it is hard not to slip into internal rhyme. I really struggled with this poem and probably will be posting another in the near future. Thank you, Balladeer. A |
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