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JustinPain New Member
since 1999-10-21
Posts 9Madison, WI, USA |
One weathered hand grasping the other Womanly once were these knobby digits Now they've no warm body to grasp Only the memories fondly remembered Two yellowed eyes gazing across the years Bright once were these myopic globes Now they've no handsome lover to behold Merely the love and longing glinting in them Three grown offspring farflung by circumstance Close once were they when young Now they've no caring father to embrace Merely the legacy of his love in their blood Four endless years mourning his departure A heart once filled with his love Now broken and forlorn, empty of joy Merely the sad husk of a woman remains Five beautiful young grandchildren Healthy and just beginning life As she brings hers to a happy end Joining her beloved at long last An Eternity of love above and below Propagated by those before us Preserved by those after us Merely the reason for life [This message has been edited by JustinPain (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Justin: Welcome to this forum! This is a wonderful poem..."merely the reason for life". Lovely! Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Justin what a wonderful poem, such an image it creates, I especially love the last verse. Bonnie |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Welcome! I also love the last verse here. An Eternity of love above and below Propagated by those before us Preserved by those after us Merely the reason for life That says an awful lot! There's such deep meaning inside those lines. For God is Love, and that's what we're here for, to Love! |
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JustinPain New Member
since 1999-10-21
Posts 9Madison, WI, USA |
Thanks so very much for the feedback...this poem feels kind of disconnected, but very good material to work on...I feel that there are two seperate ideas in this poem that i need to fully express seperately...the first i feel should be centered on the aspect of the first verses about the elderly woman, and a second poem expanding on the last verse. I really do love that last verse, and it's been so very long since I've felt inspired to write...sometimes the monotony of life silences my emotions so that I feel as though I haven't an ounce of compassion and empathy left in my soul. New experiences, and hope for the future replenish my dry well, and I hope to become a more frequent visitor here! I love you all so very much, thank you again! [This message has been edited by JustinPain (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dear Justin, welcome to the Fountain of Eternal Ink...you will indeed get all of the inspiration you could ever ask for. And when it "just doesn't come..." hop over to Challenges and be recharged! Welcome to Passions. I really enjoyed this piece...I can relate to it very well. That is what I always strive for in my work...and you've hit the nail on the head with this one. Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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