Soul on Ice (part 2&extra soul revision)

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Soul on Ice (part 2&extra soul revision)

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

0 posted 1999-12-21 08:03 PM

Some parts of this poem is not true. I just added some lines to season it up. If any of you read Soul on Ice part 1, you would have liked it too. But I like this just as much because, I've added some new lines for part 2 because this poem has new lines has more soul too.

I'm walking on thin ice,
as I continue to pay the price,
for trying to make things right.
I used to rob banks
but, I stopped.
And God is the only person who get my thanks,
as well as my props
because, everyone else just labeled me and criticized me as a thief.
All I wanted was to make some money
because, I needed it real bad.
The little money that I got from begging was all I had.
In society,
my personality is under heavy scrutiny
because, my soul suffers from severe immorality.
At times, I'm sharp as an ice pick
with a mind hard as a brick
but, I'm still not as slick,
as Rick.
Everytime I try to squeeze out of a bad cicumstance,
I usually end up with ants in my pants.
I swear to God that if I ever get the chance,
I would look at my world through a whole different glance.
I would make the changes that needs to be made
and worry less about being paid.
I've realized the consequences of society,
and I hate all of the bad notoriety I recieve.
Right now, I feel like an army greenade,
fixing to detonate,
Continuing to pay the price,
for the wrong type of sacrifice,
my soul's on ice.

Nathan

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

1 posted 1999-12-21 09:28 PM

Nate I liked this very much! Strong thoughts here. I like how you ended this...Continuing to pay the price,
for the wrong type of sacrifice,
my soul's on ice.

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

2 posted 1999-12-21 10:24 PM

Wow, it almost made me cry, Nate. Christ paid our price, so in thankfulness we go on to better ways, but I do understand what you're saying.

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member

since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

3 posted 1999-12-22 05:54 AM

*clapping* This is great, powerful and meaningful. Great job!

~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

4 posted 1999-12-22 05:03 PM

Thank you all for the beautiful replies.

Nathan

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