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Dulcinea
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0 posted 2001-07-29 02:46 PM

Radiant Light and Ebony Night

Into a land of Ebony night
Fell a star of Radiant Light
The Darkness rushed to put it out
In panic calling upon Pitch with a shout.

Yet the light grew and grew in size
'Till Darkness could not cover its eyes
In grave alarm Ebony assaulted
With graceful aplomb, Light exalted

Radiance grew stronger and larger
Darkness withdrew, weaker and smaller
Until the land of Ebony night
Was utterly consumed by Radiant Light.

Defeated, Darkness fled to abyssal spelunking
To brood in clefts of rocky overhang.
Light increased in brilliance and splendor
Inhabiting a land now burst asunder.

Light's warm glow brought flowers to bear
Strong trees grew tall and stately there
Birds of very kind were irresistibly drawn
Sweet songs of mirth were heard each dawn.

Shadows cannot cast their gloomy spell
Where'er Radiant Light chooses to dwell

Songbird
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1 posted 2001-07-29 05:30 PM

I really like the way this flows. It is a great piece of writing.

Joyce Johnson

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2 posted 2001-07-29 10:04 PM

Very, very nice. You have that right. Light will always defeat darkness. Joyce

Trillium

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3 posted 2001-07-29 10:53 PM

Good poem and it tells the truth in a dramatic way.

Betty Lou Hebert

ShadowRider
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4 posted 2001-07-29 11:10 PM

This poem has that special appeal that only comes when the writer has managed
to convey EXACTLY what they intended to. Awww, Dulcy, you have written a piece
that should be in every Inspirational poem book.

what a lovely lovely message of hope and truth.
almost breathless here....*smile*

ShadowRider

Dulcinea
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5 posted 2001-07-29 11:14 PM

Sunshine, thank you! It did flow just like that from his heart to mine,

Joyce, yep, yep, yep...thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed this!

Trillium, thank you very much, I could not have done it without him.

Shadow Rider, wow...thank you from the bottom of my heart, but the words flowed, I only followed...thanks again!

[This message has been edited by Dulcinea (edited 07-29-2001).]

Lighthousebob
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6 posted 2001-08-02 05:41 PM

I liked the intense personifications that you gave to Light and Darkness in your poem. Almost story book like in character. I liked how you displayed the battle between the two opposing forces and how Dark is defeated and Light is victorious in the end. I always like a good ending. Good job. -Bob

ellie LeJeune
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7 posted 2001-08-02 07:30 PM

Exquisitely written and glorious analogy!

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Dulcinea
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8 posted 2001-08-03 07:06 PM

Thanks Bob! I am always happy when the ending is too! I was always fascinated with stories as a child, and this one just flowed out...I am so glad that the true Light will one day deafeat all darkness...what a day that will be! *S*

Ellie, thank you so very much! I appreciate you coming by to comment so kindly!

A Tone of Voice
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9 posted 2001-08-04 10:49 AM

Shadows cannot cast their gloomy spell
Where'er Radiant Light chooses to dwell

Dulci, this is truly lovely,

*S*

ATOV

Dulcinea
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10 posted 2001-08-05 03:15 PM

Thank you ATOV, thank you very much and welcome to the forum BTW.

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